求助!!,缺少一点优美和连贯

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  janetgqh (05/09/2008)

  <It is as though some giant’s hand were squeezing the trunks of the trees, forcing the sap up and along the branches, for the blossom seems to squirt into the air.>
  
  Thank you for your help. I need some beatiful words..could you give some advices?~

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  陈奕丰 (05/09/2008)

  它就好象某些巨人的手在挤压着树的干, 逼迫树的汁液沿着树干向上, 使得花朵象似要射入空气中一般.

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  Jolly Roger (05/16/2008)

  优美...恐怕有点困难。因为我的理解是：气势恢宏，生机勃勃的。- -|||在保证整句连贯风格一致的前提下，尝试翻译如下：
  
  如有巨人之手紧握着树干，
  
  汁液沿枝杈奔涌而上，
  
  朵朵蓓蕾似凌空迸发般怒放。

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  陈奕丰 (05/16/2008)

  好,这样翻更活泼,生动. 画面又精彩了许多. 文学译作在原有的意境下,自有一番舒展文字的天地.